The Woman

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Jeevan wasn’t aware that he had invited someone home this weekend. His cleaning maid, who had the house key, must have let whoever it was in the kitchen, into the house. He came out of his room and stretched himself wondering why the decor of his apartment looked different this morning.

The smell of the waffles and the humming of “Lat Lag Gayee” pulled him towards the kitchen , where he noticed the back of the woman who was placing the waffles onto a plate and pouring some syrup over it. When she turned, he saw, to his horror, that her face was covered with blood and one eye was popping out and was hanging on her cheek! He stood rooted to the ground in a state of shock.

Just then, he heard loud noises behind him and turned around to face all of his friends and family entering his apartment and wishing him a “Happy Birthday”. He turned around back towards the kitchen, but it was empty!

All through the cake cutting and the brunch that followed, Jeevan wondered why the face of the woman, he thought he saw, looked so familiar.

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Written for the Festival Of Words 3 – Day 1 @Β Write TribeΒ : Write a Β 9 Sentence Fiction today.

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70 thoughts on “The Woman

  1. That was scary! Was it someone he had hurt earlier in his life?

    BTW I love waffles πŸ™‚ Nice to have you visit my space through Write Tribe πŸ™‚ Keep in touch ..

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  2. ooh! How interesting… I wonder who she was?
    Was she really there or was he seeing things?

    Such a spooky way to celebrate a birthday!

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  3. Ouuu — kind of put me off the waffles for a while…:-) Captivating story! Hopefully it was a ghost from his past, and he could still enjoy his day with his loved ones..:-)

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  4. The games that fate plays with us ! Was he into abusing women ? Was it a woman from his past who had come back to haunt him ? Or was it just a spooky trick played by his friends on his birthday ?
    Well spun narrative !

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    • Thank you Prasanna. I am glad you enjoyed it. Yes, putting it all into 9 sentences was a daunting task. I don’t think I have used so many commas in my life before. πŸ™‚

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  5. now u beta complete the story… this seems like chapter 1 and then wat happned? BTW did you have to use waffles only…… now everytime I will see this fav dish of mine I will think of ur story yea n the spooky elemnt in it is high….

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  6. Silly Maid. Shouldn’t have argued for a raise on memory-loss day. πŸ˜›

    Really awesome story. Eagerly waiting for the sequel.

    Cheers
    CRD

    Updated my blog twice in the past month. Do drop by.

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  7. SCARY!!! I love spooky stuff, Jyothi! very very well written and leaves me wanting to know more about who the woman was and why her face was familiar. Do take it forward soon πŸ™‚

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